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  • Submitted on time! Feb 4, 2024
Meteor Shower at the Motel

started this last week and never got around to finishing it, but listened to it again today and i’m excited enough about the potential that I figured I’d share what I have, nonsense half-verse and all.

the prompt immediately painted an image of someone in the middle of nowhere on a road trip by themselves, staying in a random motel and watching the meteor shower and feeling surreal.

Looking for feedback on

where should I go from here??


EliasSZ February 14, 2024 11:10am

Your production is always so right on. Like just absolute bangers every time. Do you need to go anywhere from here? I feel like this is kinda tight as it is, 90 seconds of slap.

alechutson February 9, 2024 4:01pm

Oooh i like the string arrangement paired with with gritty synth.

Does it need to go anywhere from here? I guess if you wanted to extend the song I could see a new section come in with some different chords and new feel. But I can also see this as a fun little interlude between longer tracks on a record.

Ben February 6, 2024 4:48pm

Man you have such good pop sensibilities and know how to make a 90 second long banger.

juliapiker February 6, 2024 2:47pm

Obsessed with your submission as always. So good. My mind always goes into arrangement mode when I listen to your stuff. All the elements are perfect, production is top notch. I feel like we can fuck with where each element belongs and when it should enter. Obviously mallets and vox coming in at the top together are hot hot hot- but what if we waited on the guitar to come in a little bit later. After you say “Chicago”? I also think that the mallets could come in and out- I think playing with the arrangement here could be really fun.

nick February 5, 2024 11:45am

oh im all about the “hmmph” at :29. very well executed. “the sky is falling and im two nights from chicago.” im such a sucker for that kind of lyricism. hmm, from here? maybe something that feels more open? a spacier section could be a nice counterpart to the fuller sections you’ve already created.

Ryan February 6, 2024 10:04pm

Space is what I’m thinking, too. Maybe a free-floating-lush-but-light type of thing.

Ben February 5, 2024 10:30am

Dude I love this. short and sweet and creepy. Definitely approaches motels from the creepy side of things, not the romantic side. Unless you find creepiness romantic.

Great atmosphere, and great job with the shaping of all these sounds. There’s a lot of rhythm, syncopation, melody, ideas, and voices, but you really succeed in keeping everything in this nice, controlled little space. Doesn’t occupy too much bandwidth in my ears. All the layers sound nice and either compressed, EQ’d, dampened, softened… I dont know… Maybe you can speak to how to kept all the parts tamed so that it’s not overwhelming. I’d be curious. There’s grit and mud in this song, but it doesnt sound gritty or muddy, if that makes sense.

Ben February 5, 2024 10:22am (edited)

If you told Tom Waits to write the sequel to The Real Slim Shady using nothing but a xylophone made out of bones, you’d get the first 24 seconds or so of this this song.

agasthya February 5, 2024 10:44am

hahaha I realized as soon as I posted it that the marimba riff is basically the same as real slim shady. When i was growing up my dad went through a phase of having the Tom Waits album “Alice” on repeat, and it definitely influenced my overall musical instincts.

Ryan February 6, 2024 10:03pm

hahahah Ben. Amazing.

lazyrabbit February 5, 2024 10:16am

Love this – getting real EARTHGANG vibes here although I know they’re ATL not CHI haha. Loving all the little plucky rhythmic noises – the percussion and those plucky guitars blend together amazingly.

agasthya February 5, 2024 10:47am

what’s funny is that the motel I was picturing when writing this was one by the ATL airport (0/5 would not recommend). EARTHGANG is one of the most consistently exciting groups, I wanna be them when I grow up