imagined friend
Mar 12, 2023
agasthya
First Words
oooof this was very difficult for me. Here’s what I did:
- read a week’s worth of poems and extracted lines that I liked
- frankensteined the lines into its own poem
- rewrote stuff to make some sense
- pulled my hair out trying to write music to it until 8pm today and then just decided to share what i have rather than not submit anything
overall i think this turned out ok. but i loved the challenge! lyrics:
hello my old imagined friend
It’s been a lifetime since the end
come and sit down by my side
reminisce on times gon by
Here we are again
turning round
From end to end
Ghostly faces rushing by
passing ships all through the night
here I’ll give you thunder
here ill give rain
Here I’ll give you whispers
whispers of your name
i’ve lived it all
and after all
ill still love you
as i can
Here we are again
turning round
From end to end
come and sit down by my side
reminisce on times gone by
hello my old imagined friend
its good to see you once again
and as the days go rushing by
ill see your light behind my eyes
lines stolen from:
Appalachian Elegy (Sections 1-6)
BY BELL HOOKS
you are here again
turning slowly
spreading over the hillside
wild roses
here I will give you thunder
shatter your hearts with rain
People
Ghost-flux of faces that hie
Them endlessly, endlessly by
Malcolm X, February 1965
i will love them
as only i can.
Looking for feedback on
the arrangement feels boring, what should i do
Discussion
nick March 27, 2023 9:37am
Love the new pic, btw📸
EliasSZ March 24, 2023 9:22am
Just getting a chance to listen now. The beat drop at :45 took me by surprise in a really lovely way. The contrast in styles between the sweet acoustic sound and the more produced drums.
Also, the ‘a capella’ section is really nice (even if the keys are still there for now).
Ben March 15, 2023 6:46pm
I think most of us here agree that this was one of the most challenging assignments yet. And a lot of the submissions seem to be departures for a lot of us. What a refreshing sound you’ve got here.
It’s chill and soft and gentle and pretty, and just as I was getting used to it and getting settled in for a nice sweet acoustic ride, the beat drops (0:46). Still stays chill af but gets a slight edge and attitude to it. I *love* the kick sound and *really love* the rimshot sample. What a great little song. The tension in the chords, vocals, and bass right at 1:23 are amazing.
Excellent outro, too.
I hope to see this song, or some version of it, in a future swelo release. Job well done.
nick March 14, 2023 3:00pm
oh this is wonderful. love this gentler version of your voice. really nice warbly guitar. honestly im hooked all the way through 1:06. Wouldn’t mind going right into the acapella section right there, then maybe looping back to the section where the drums originally enter. and totally dig the outro. i dunno, something like that, but i really like this whole thing, great job.
Ben March 15, 2023 6:47pm
“warbly” is a good description. goes well with the fairly straightforward nonwarbly rhodes. good call not making the rhodes too rhodesy and warbly.
agasthya March 12, 2023 9:32pm (edited)
oops. i forgot to take out the keys in the last verse (stanza?) so no acapella moment 😳.
also lead vocal at 1:06 is way too loud