The Lazy A

  • Submitted on time! Feb 4, 2024
Meteor Shower at the Motel

Wrote the lyrics first and had a difficult time finding a melody for them… ended up on a trancey dance floor somehow. I used the list of Motel’s Ryan shared, and wrote this song about a mother giving birth alone under a falling sky of meteors, while the manual car she barely knew how to drive was still running in the U-shaped driveway of the Lazy Motel back in 1949. Also learned the word “bailiwick” so had to throw that in there. Not especially proud of my cascading melody (upfront) but heck it will have to do. Enjoy!


Still we were
Above it all
Still we were
Above it all
Born in the U at the Lazy A
Falling skies in her eyes
Bloody stucco
Dress and knuckle
V8 in the drive
Rattling stick
Well outside
Her bailiwick
Sharing stares where
Sands sparely flick
Where hands barely tick
Still we were
Above it all
Still we were
Above it all

Looking for feedback on

How do these lyrics work for you? Tried to fit a fair bit of description in there.


Caleb February 25, 2024 6:26pm

“sharing stares where sands sparely flick where hands barely tick tick tick tick tick” was such a pleasing collection of Mouth Sounds on the ear, very poetry poetic the way they stumble into each other. The ensuing music drop afterwards was a great pay-off after those lyrics almost dragged back on the beat. The tension and release. Great stuff, as always sir.

EliasSZ February 14, 2024 10:47am

This took me by total surprise. Thom Yorke-esque vocals at the top didn’t have me expecting the, like, indie-electronica-8-bit-dance tune? I could see you pulling back on the vocal processing a bit at 1:17, but I think it worked for me overall.

Lyrics work for me. Lot of strength in their detail but concision.

nurphgun February 8, 2024 10:17pm

0:35 “Aboooove it all (aboveitall)” = very nice

Without the background, I would not have had the faintest clue what the song was about, but that’s totally fine. You managed to make some really tricky words sound natural.

I see what @@Ryanmeans about the manic vocal at 1:17 but it is a really satisfying & kind of relieving fun moment, settles the tune into a solid Nick bop and gets us going on the dancefloor. But right, definitely worth asking, is that where we’re supposed to be? Or should we be calling an ambulance for this woman?!

I am also so down for the whole outro – just great layering of melodies & sounds leaving plenty of little pockets for individual phrases to shine – you always find a way to make repetitive sections like this feel super composed and intentional.

nick February 10, 2024 9:39am (edited)

thanks nora! ya, i don’t actually think it should feel too fun, but it also isn’t meant to be a dire situation. the mom and baby are fine. in fact, i think she’s relieved she didn’t have to try and drive the stick to the hospital. now they’re just kind of looking into the stars meditating on time travel. tick_tick__tick____tick____________tick.

Ryan February 7, 2024 1:05pm

Well okay let’s rip mate.

Man do I love the melodies and rhythm on that second vocal. That feels like the emotional core of the song to me. That and the “krrrr-ET” hi-hat at the end of each phrase. The manic vocal at 1:17 actually feels out of place to me. With the story and the vibe. I think melodically it works—but could it be on another voice? A chopped acoustic guitar or something? I think it’s because I want something more organic-sounding, even if it is wonky.

Lyrics are awesome. Agreed with @@juliapiker that you have a real talent for powerful brevity. And I mean “Well outside / Her bailiwick / Sharing stares where / Sands sparely flick / Where hands barely tick” is just an absolute blast.

nick February 7, 2024 1:56pm

lol yeah i think that’s a great callout. it is too fun, and that clashes with the ~relative~ seriousness of the rest of the track. it’s a little bit like “hey it’s all good, dude, whatever man, crazy place, huh??” once i got started with it though i was just not willing to stop 🙃

Ben February 6, 2024 4:59pm

Funny, this song autoplayed and I assumed it was someone else until the “stiiiilllll–”

So fun to hear your take on this type of banger 4 on the floor.

I think i credit Thom Yorke with bridging the gap between these types of drum beats and me. In fact, the “Born in the U at the Lazy A/Falling skies in her eyes/Bloody stucco” part sounds very Yorkey. Then it doesnt anymore after 1;17

The vocals after the tick tick tick sound like they were a lot of fun to record. I also love when the full beat drops at 1;29.I thought we were at maximum, but we weren’t until then.

Ryan February 7, 2024 12:28pm

haha yeah I totally thought it was gonna be @@TylerK before the vocal came in. Definitely Yorkey once the second vocal comes in. Great composition on that.

nick February 10, 2024 9:37am

a lot of fun to record for sure. realized i must have been freaking out my tenants—had to relocate.

juliapiker February 6, 2024 2:59pm

Oh this vocal is exactly what I want to hear. So so good. I love that we play with long legato melody alongside more repetitive vox. As always your brain is amazing and comes up with such interesting layers and melodic arrangements. Fuck yes fuck yes. hell yes to the drop out at :38- There is so much perfect movement here. OoOOOOOOOO baby 1:30 lets GOOOOOOOO. I like the juxtaposition of it being a Lazy A against this propulsive and magnetic synth arrangement. It works really well.

I love the lyrics. I have no notes there. You always manage to say so much with so little and i’ve always appreciated that.

nick February 10, 2024 9:36am

d’aw thanks jules. appreciate your vigor.

troods February 6, 2024 12:18pm

I second @@BennyJamJamz and I offer – This is like Thom Yorke and Phoenix had a baby.

This is such a bop. It’s got me feeling like I need to jump around, what a crispy little parcel. I don’t have anything constructive to say because I’m way out of my depth but I really, really enjoyed it.

Tick tick tick, baby!!!!

nick February 6, 2024 3:10pm


Ben February 5, 2024 3:15pm

This is sweet! The vocal layering really reminds me of Thom Yorke, especially his solo stuff. If I were to change something, it’d be the chorus at 1:16 feels like it needs a little more variation. I think lines 1 2 and 3 are the same chords, with a little variation on line 4—but I was hoping for a variation by the time we hit line 3. It could be something small, like the relative minor, but something to break it up a little more. Great tune, though.

nick February 6, 2024 3:13pm

thanks ben! mmm yeah i hear that about the variation. in the first version, that’s exactly what I had. then I actually accidentally deleted it and got hooked on this trance-ier mayhem. great suggestion.

Ben February 6, 2024 5:00pm

ya @@BennyJamJamz i had the same thought about Thom Yorke.

alechutson February 4, 2024 9:20pm

this slaps

nick February 5, 2024 4:05pm


alechutson February 9, 2024 3:56pm

I frequently don’t have an idea of what you’re singing until I read the lyrics. But then I am always blown away by how poetic and intentional it all is. Composition and arrangement is on point, what a BOP