One Town North of Boise
Feb 4, 2024
danhunt
Meteor Shower at the Motel
Hey chefs! I’m pretty brand new to recording, this was a fantastic experiment/learning experience for me. There’s so many simple things about working with a DAW that I learned that I don’t know how to do this week. Grateful to have this opportunity to practice and get feedback. Hope you enjoy this!
I’ll note that my time spent outdoors at night was in Gantry Park in Queens by the water, and it was so damn peaceful. The lyrics center on a night in Boise (or one town north of Boise) at a shitty motel after a day in Yellowstone. Of course, I didn’t see meteors that night, but I imagined I did, and then used the imagined experience as a metaphor for a romantic relationship.
Lyrics:
I can’t sleep
2:16 am
1000 miles still flowing past my eyes
Try to remember the advice
Of the podcast that my girlfriend likes
But there’s no space inside my head,
No vacancy
Boise, or one town North of Boise
Cheap resting place where I happen to be
I can’t take the achy silence ringing in my head
Relenting to a fresh air remedy
The shaky neon sign is blinking with delight
At the tricks it’s started playing on my eyes
My bleary-lidded focus
Is fading at the seams
Diffusing and confusing like a dream
When down from the sky
Comes falling beams of light
Dismembering the interrupted night
And so it was the way you came to me
When I was in the messy nothing sea
And through it all
That’s what you mean to me
Your tear drops or the space rock start to fall
Looking for feedback on
Oh, god, I know this is so sloppy, but I will take any help I can get re: working with a DAW to make things sound better, cleaner, etc.
Discussion
Caleb February 25, 2024 6:51pm
felt like listening to an unreleased Creed song, in all of the best ways. epic guitar work. i can hear the drums and bass in my head, which is a testament to the structure of your piece, it evokes those missing pieces like phantom limbs.
alechutson February 9, 2024 4:07pm
DAN great to finally hear your music! Great job, I think this song just needs a full band arrangement to bring out the sparkle.
danhunt February 10, 2024 5:49pm
Thanks so much Alec! Really happy to be here. My goal this weekend is to start learning how to program drums etc to flesh this and future projects out, completely agree!!
Ryan February 7, 2024 12:26pm
Dan! Rough or not, you got the dang thing done! Well done! Psyched to have you here.
Evocative guitar playing and singing, as always with your songwriting. I think there’s a lot to work with here.
It’s interesting—with the guitar and vocal tones you went with, I think you might be chasing a phantom by worrying about “how to make things sound better in a DAW” just yet, because I think the tones are suggestive of a bigger arrangement. Big drums, eletric bass, more rhythm guitars, etc. I find that when I’m trying to improve elements via mix when the arrangement isn’t there yet, it can be fruitless. Did you play around with adding full band elements to this?
danhunt February 10, 2024 5:52pm
Psyched to be here my friend, thank you! I really appreciate that wisdom, I think the piece absolutely demands a fuller arrangement. A lot of the music in my head is that way, so that’s a helpful tidbit to help me prioritize what to work on learning next.
EliasSZ February 14, 2024 11:27am
Really agree with @@Ryan – I love that guitar tone, but it definitely made me want a larger arrangement with more parts. I think that’ll help it feel bigger in the first place. Could definitely hear this with a big full band arrangement, and I think it’d naturally help the existing guitar and vocals feel more supported and larger straight off.
Ben February 6, 2024 4:54pm
Hey great voice! Post the lyrics!
danhunt February 10, 2024 5:44pm
Thank you!! I’ve added them in, great suggestion 🙂
nick February 5, 2024 11:52am
immediately into this guitar composition. really well written and performed. especially the ending line but honestly all of it is great. i barely know what im talking about when it comes to mixing, but i would suggest youtubing about adding compression to vocals on whichever DAW you use and just copy them. i feel like the raw wav files you’ve recorded could be really strong with the right amount of mixing. nice job!
danhunt February 10, 2024 5:54pm
Thanks for your kind words, Nick!! This suggestion is exactly the kind of advice I was looking for, really appreciate it and am excited to learn exactly what compression does to vocals haha!