Woof i really got this in at 8:59pm on submission day.
I realllly labored with this song. I dunno what it was but it really just did not want to come out. I think I got a little stuck in the weeds trying to write to fit the mood I perceived for the prompt — maybe the setting felt a little too specific for me. In any case, I loved the reminder to go and experience the night time as part of the process.
I finally had a bit of a breakthrough on Friday. I had scrapped a big twinkly intro section that dealt more with the motel and meteor shower, so there’s only a few subtle lines left in there that are actually referring to the scenery (I’m checking in, you’re checking out// Lying on the ground, watching the stars as they’re coming down).
The cascading melody (if I understood it correctly) is the last melodic tag at the end.
You said something that made me feel weird
I sat and I waited for a while,
Trying to think of a way to tell you
It’s all right, it’s all wrong, you see?
You think that I’m having a moment,
I’ll show you the box that you’ve opened
Take a look – it’s all the same if you
Choose to give me all of the blame
But it’s all wrong, it’s all right with me
I don’t know what you want from me,
Telling me how you want me to be
And if I fight it then it all comes tumbling
I’m checking in and you’re checking out
Starting to see what it’s all about
We could just make up and all just laugh about it
Last night I sent you a letter,
Hoping to make everything better
But I know, nothing ever gets through to you
When you know that you have the whole truth
Feeling my back against the wall,
Better to spill than not speak at all
What if we make up and all just laugh about it?
And if I’m laying on the ground,
Watching the stars as they’re coming down
Will the neighbors yell or all just laugh about it?
I try to always be honest,
Speaking from the heart when I have the chance
But that just keeps on losing me people that
I’m trying to break through to, you see?
But it’s all what you make of the scene
Looking for feedback on
Lemme hear it. Really didn't have any time to mix, so not that. What direction should this song go?