Merriam-Webster defines Lullaby (lul·la·by | \ ˈlə-lə-ˌbī \) as:
: (n) a soothing refrain
Specifically: a song to quiet children or lull them to sleep.
Hopefully this is helpful.
I used the melody from the chorus of Veronica by Elvis Costello, which was released on my birth year of 1989.
I have fought, I have felt through the waking hours
Did the best that I could, did alright
Shut my eyes and leave the day far behind me
As I drift out of here
Leave your oversized sweater on the chair
And make your nest beside me
Looking for feedback on
Anything you feel compelled to comment on!
juliapiker May 12, 2020 1:49pm
I love your submissions. They’re always so out of the box and unique. The piano is pretty.
I don’t know if Aubrey Peeples can see this but I think you guys should collaborate. I hear your voices sitting really nicely together on something that could be in the style of Beirut.
Sam Pearce May 11, 2020 2:56pm
I think it’s awesome how chromatic and rhythmic this is. I have a hard time writing music that isn’t completely diatonic, and I saw a “lullabye” as an opportunity to fall back on that. I think this song is soothing and you managed to make it that way with syncopation and a range of color.
nurphgun May 10, 2020 9:46pm
The driving piano in this moves the whole thing forward with a nice, steady energy. Absolutely love the unusual rhythm and phrasing on “here” and “sweatER”–such unexpected and cool little nuggets in this song. I too think you can keep the volume up on the vocals toward the end; they get quiet earlier than I’d like them to. Poetically, I like the idea of it winding down as we get closer to falling asleep, but maybe you can get that across in how you sing it, instead of pulling the volume down in the mix.
ryan May 10, 2020 7:34pm
Pretty cool that you fearlessly hop around harmonically/melodically. I always admire that in your work. Really love the melody and arrangement that comes in on ‘shut my eyes’. Would love to hear the live band version of this track—you pepper some very cool drum composition ideas in here. But I wanna hear a hooman play them. Well done on this one, man.
aubspeeps May 10, 2020 6:44pm
I love the piano in this, and I love the lyric “leave your oversized sweater on the chair,” so tactile we can immediately feel the intimacy of the moment of going to bed; I love your voice so my one note of feedback would be that it gets a bit lost in the mix towards the end. I was immediately struck by how beautiful your voice is the first time I heard it and I would love to hear more of it! 🙂
nick May 11, 2020 10:13am
Yeah, i love the last phrase in the lyrics. I also agree about missing your voice at the end. Sleep on, brother.