Gunner
danhunt
Mostly Melody
Limited on time this week, so I had to start with an old, unfinished, never-recorded idea that fit right in with this week’s prompt. I chose to voice the chords differently for the different sections, but the Fm – Eb – Dbmaj7 backbone stays constant throughout.
The unfiltered, effectless constraint sent me straight to my acoustic guitar for this one. I felt like the raw, single vocal track was all that was needed.
Also just gotta shout out the extra angsty part always feels like some sort of Staind breakdown to me. So thanks to Aaron Lewis for the inspiration for that.
Lyrics
“Gunner”
When I woke up
I couldn’t see the world come down
When I reached out
I couldn’t feel you movin’ round
I let you in
So you could see yourself right out
My voice will call
My ears’ll never hear your sound
Well it was true from the time we met
That our sun was doomed to set
And though it scarred us, it hurt so bad
It was the best thing that we had
But all I knew
Was that I loved you
Gunner you shot me through
When you were hurt, I couldn’t sleep
5AM on the phone in the cold all alone
With my head
In my hands
My heart in my throat
As you’d berate me from your throne
And I begged you, from my knees
Said you were all I’d need
And on those nights all I could do
Was try to make it through
Gunner what was I to do?
And all I’d say
Was that we’d make it day
Gunner your sights turned so gray
Interlude Part
And you hurt me so bad that I can’t even cry
Because I can’t comprehend who you are if I tried
And it doesn’t make sense on these nights all alone
Cuz I ain’t heard your voice since we hung up the phone
Your words twist and divide
Pernicious death of my pride
And all I could be, be
Was what you wanted to see
Gunner please set me free
I’m still learning to breathe
Healing holes you shot in me
Gunner our dreams fell like leaves
And I wish I could say
You never loved me anyway
Gunner there’s nothing more to say
Looking for feedback on
I didn't fiddle much at all with the EQ and compression, so any suggestions you have there would be good. I'm open to feedback on vocal technique, lyrics, and overall form to possibly make this tighter.
Discussion
alechutson March 24, 2024 3:25pm
Very nice – takes me back to early 2010’s vibes. I think your lyrics, guitar playing and singing are quite effective. If I had to make a suggestion on your vocal delivery I would say to focus on consistent breath support – there were a few spots where I felt like your time was wavering because you were running out of breath. But in general, just keep playing and writing and singing 💪
Carseat March 18, 2024 3:19pm
I dig it! Your voice is quite lovely. I think your mix could benefit from a bit less low-mids in the guitar — when your voice gets more intense, having the brighter tone will help it rise with you. And if there’s aaaaany way you can quikly snatch a pick for those sections too, those chords could really ring.
alechutson March 24, 2024 3:21pm
I agree on the mids/lows of the guitar — it gets a little boomy towards the end of the chorus in particular.