I'm Never Leaving

  • Submitted on time! Jan 31, 2024
Meteor Shower at the Motel

Setting: Desert Motel, middle of the night, dusty, vast and dark. Wind is whistling and the sky is starry.

I’m gonna start by saying I rarely write lyrical music anymore, and I rarely write with guitar anymore. So this was truly me challenging myself to return to my roots and think about lyrics and melody in a deeper way. I actually got pretty emotional writing it, I think because it reminded me of writing love songs when I was .. gosh.. like 13? Also, you know I can’t stay away from scoring an entire vibe. We need wind, we need sparkles. I think I might finish it, but wanted to send this to you all and get your thoughts.

I barely mixed this so apologies if its boomy or loud


I thought it was a joke

Locked the door when I went out for a smoke

Is this a game to you

My key card doesnt work

So I’m waiting

Kicking rocks into the dirt

It’s all the same to you

I’m never leaving

Never leaving this motel without you


Looking for feedback on

What do you think about the group and delayed vox? Do you think a singular voice would make more sense on the verses? I think I like the group vocal because I like the way the cluster feels- and also I'm singing in head voice which is kinda out of my range


EliasSZ February 14, 2024 11:48am

This is really, really good. Super evocative. I love the group vocals. Wouldn’t want a singular voice. Makes me feel like its your own voice rattling around in your own head. Feels like it also intensifies the yearning I get from the lyrics. The ambience in the arrangement, also. So haunting.

danhunt February 10, 2024 6:41pm

This is heart-clenchingly, stomach-twistingly good. Wow! Also completely admire the efficiency of your lyrics here.

I like everything you’ve done with the vocals here, I think I’d personally want to think about adding some spots of vocal distortion in the interest of highlighting some angsty emotional moments above others, but just something to consider playing around with if that suits your taste as well. Again, stellar creation here!

Z February 9, 2024 7:16pm (edited)

@@peter can you filter out the submissions that make me cry?

jk please don’t. This is gorgeous, zero fluff, music puts my body right there, lyrics put my mind right there, well done.

Ryan February 6, 2024 10:06pm

Just noticed that high note at 0:45 — didn’t realize that sneaked in right before the vocals. biiiiig into that.

zoya February 6, 2024 9:51pm

the intro is pristine — sounds like mermaids in the background what is that?

Echoing what everyone else said about the lyrics, felt like I was there watching the story unfold

nurphgun February 6, 2024 9:25pm

@@juliapiker The emotion in this. It’s such a powerful, devastating vignette. Key card doesn’t work, kicking rocks into the dirt, oof.

We watched A Murder at the End of the World a couple months ago, and since you did such brilliant work on that show, I couldn’t help but think of Bill and Darby as the two characters in this song, and it honestly works for me big time. I was so enchanted by those characters, and I feel like this song is a deleted/bonus scene.

I am a sucker always for grouped/clustered vocals – I wouldn’t change it. Whenever I’m recording vocals and I double my own voice, upon first playback I always feel like “ah, there we go.” It creates so much cohesion IMO. Maybe the very last line, “without you”, could work in one voice.

Its Play February 6, 2024 7:48pm

Vibey as flip, smooth as butter, good stuff ay! Only thing for me personally is that the intro is quite long, but honestly its good either way. Also I thing the grouped vocals are algoods throughout!

Ben February 6, 2024 4:18pm

Can hear an equally-delayed-as-your-vox, earthy sounding snare, kick, ride in this.

This is so mellow, yet it somehow reminds me of some slightly harderhitting post-rock stuff for some reason. Maybe because of the continuous building guitar chunking for the entire time.

This is so great.

And the slightly unsettling tiny synth noise at 2:06 is in such good contrast with the rest of the notes, which are all resolving so nicely.

So cinematic, and full. Love this.

Ryan February 6, 2024 1:23pm

This is gorgeous. Great atmosphere, awesome melodies, and excellent minimal guitar backbone. Nothing contrived about this.

Regarding the question about vocal arrangement, I like the stacks but definitely wouldn’t mind hearing the “main” vocal a bit more present. Additionally, at the end, I want some of the higher background harmonies to open up. Definitely don’t want to compromise the natural sound you achieved here, but if some of the vocals were a little less restrained, I think that might put the final touch on the emotional palate for me. Great work!

alechutson February 6, 2024 12:27pm

The queen of vibey soundscapes is at it again! Really dropped into this one, I think all of your choices work for me here. Love the octaved delayed vocals, gives some Boy Genius vibes.

troods February 6, 2024 12:05pm


I could truly listen again and again. Just stunning, moved me – felt like a twisty improvement on an early aughts indie track for a movie that would definitely, definitely make me cry. I’m never leavin’…this track, because it fucking slaps.

nick February 6, 2024 3:27pm


nick February 5, 2024 4:25pm

is it friggin cold in here? chills. glad you gave this thing ago, and that it brought you back to your roots. “is this a game to you” has an excellent melody. and “key card” is just a great thing to use as a lyric. the ambiguity of exactly what’s going on here is intriguing… is this just a joke? is there something more sinister afoot? if so, who is planning it?

im totally digging the delayed groupy vox. could definitely hear a straightforward kit chunkin away at some point. i know a guy.

peter February 5, 2024 5:15pm

maybe this is a joke? i definitely thought it was a shitty abusive relationship 😬

peter February 5, 2024 2:53pm

this is so beautiful and tragic. knowing that the sky is filled with other-worldly excitement and beauty, which she does not experience at all because she’s caught in this toxic spiral, staring down at her feet. it’s chilling.

i wonder if there’s a way to help a listener who does not know the prompt understand her setting more (had she looked up, maybe she would have realized the relationship was BAD)… it could be shifting a lyric or 2 or renaming the song?

Ben February 5, 2024 12:41pm

Hauntingly beautiful! The soundscape in the intro has so much subtlety—it must have been tempting to make those wind chime-esque sounds louder, but I love how they’re kept down. “I’m never leaving” is so haunting and aching, and after something like 30 seconds, we’re finally hit with that resolution “without you” that brings it to a close—tension and release is so often done in chords, and you’ve managed to do it in lyrics. This is awesome.

agasthya February 4, 2024 10:26pm

I’m obsessed with this. The guitar sounds great. I like the group vocals – it keeps it in the ethereal vibe you cultivate over that intro. Maybe include the lower register layer (like what you can hear during the “key card doesn’t work” section) at the end, but just for “never leaving this motel”. Great great great songwriting.

agasthya February 5, 2024 9:45am

ok after my 1000th listen, i think it actually might be cool to hear a stronger “main” voice but just on some phrases: “locked the door“, “kicking rocks“*. like just a leeetle emphasis so we can ground the emotions a bit within the ethereal vocals.

*@@peter feature suggestion – option to add a 30sec voice memo to comments so we can sing what we’re trying to convey?

Ben February 5, 2024 1:00pm

very cool idea.

peter February 5, 2024 2:38pm

cool idea for sure! noted.