Cephlopods Are the Cure
Sep 24, 2023
stonewindow
Stegochorus
First time to participate. Thanks for inviting me. This process also prompted me to learn the bare minimum on GarageBand. I’m happy about that
I love geology. Imagining an environment and climate from 200 million years ago gleaned from stratigraphy and the fossil record is magic.
It’s me strumming an acoustic guitar and singing. My first recorded percussion track does appear. Feels primitive to me.
lyric
Chorus:
We met 200 million years ago
In the Jurassic period
Back when Allosaurus were spawning
Been together for 200 million years
Ginko trees sprouted in the northern climes, but
Cephalopods were the cure
Verse 1:
We were confused when Pangea ruptured
The Caribbean Sea was a baby
We built a boat to sail across the new pond
Repeat chorus
Verse 2:
The atmosphere was full of ash
Volcanoes dotted the landscape
Our boat sailed to safety
We left the magma behind
The tectonic plates continued to collide
Repeat chorus
Looking for feedback on
Any feedback is welcome. As y’all know it’s a rough demo.
Discussion
EliasSZ October 8, 2023 2:18pm
Welcome and sorry for my late reply! I, too, am intimidated by the production chops on a lot of the folks in this group – but can guarantee there’s nothing bad that can happen. It’s just fun to share songs, whatever the form.
I second Alec’s bard/storyteller vibe – and to echo Ryan’s sentiment, one suggestion for lyric writing is exploring letting complete thoughts spill over onto multiple musical phrases – ideas starting in one line, yet resolving in another. Great song, welcome!
stonewindow February 27, 2024 4:40pm
Thank you for your feedback I’m just seeing your comment.
Ben September 26, 2023 10:21am
howdy, and welcome! i remember fondly, years ago, being like, “hey what’s this game with the sunburst guitar icon that came with this imac?” So many countless hundreds of hours spent digging around that software. Lots of fun.
Pangea “rupturing” is a cool way to frame it. In fact, that whole verse is some ingenious wording.
Looking forward to your next songs.
stonewindow September 26, 2023 8:46pm
Thanks for this Ben. I’m fully intimidated and inspired by y’all and your songwriting skills. But I’m planning to persist. What’s the worst that can happen? Some other form of “rupture”
nick September 26, 2023 10:15am
Great primitive outro! Glad to have you onboard. How great is it to start getting comfortable with Garageband, right? Such a wonderful software, and eventually, quite easy to use. Don’t hesitate to google or youtube any obstacles… there are loads of videos for troubleshooting nearly everything on there. Super fun track. Favorite lyric is “The Caribbean Sea was a baby”.
stonewindow September 26, 2023 8:43pm
Yes, I was totally supported by Ryan to get my the song submitted. I was a pain in the ass for his Sunday afternoon. And yes the motivation to dig into GarageBand is a blessing. And it doesn’t produce mp3 files… another YouTube video rabbit hole that was fruitless because I am using an iPad….
The lyrics came pretty fast. They could use some editing. Glad you liked the “ ….. baby”. Attempts at humor are also a challenge. Thank you for creating this opportunity.
alechutson September 25, 2023 12:05pm
Hi, welcome!
I’d love to read along to the lyrics, would you mind posting them?
You’ve got a great bard/storyteller vibe to this song. I can almost imagine a group of wide-eyed children arranged in a circle around you as you regale them about cephlopods
stonewindow September 25, 2023 6:28pm
Alec Thanks for your kind words. I just added the lyrics as they currently stand.
Ryan September 25, 2023 10:44am
Love the upper register of your voice, Brit. Great tone, great control. Really sounds fantastic.
Borrowing one of Zoya’s favorite pieces of criticism of my own songwriting, here: I think keeping an eye on the number of syllables that work smoothly with your melodies could improve the overall rhythmic feel of the song. Then I think the guitar rhythm and vocal rhythm could settle together.
In other news—I love the idea of being with someone for 200 million years haha.
Great inclusion of the percussion at the end! I think that’s a brilliant outro.
stonewindow September 25, 2023 6:29pm
Thank you Ryan. Your comments are very helpful. Much appreciated.
nick September 26, 2023 10:16am
I second Ryan’s comment about your higher vocal range—sounds really strong!
stonewindow September 26, 2023 8:36pm
Thanks Nick, appreciate your kind words.